pomóżcie, język angielski.

[agrr]

Mogłybyście sprawdzić, czy tekst jest poprawnie napisany? Miałam napisać o wspomnieniu z dzieciństwa i fajnie by było jakbyście co nie co poprawiły, bo na pewno są błędy. Tam gdzie nie jestem pewna słów, tłumaczyłam w nawiasach o co chodzi. Z góry dziękuję.

MY CHILDHOOD MEMORY
It happend a few years ago. I was about eight years old. It was evening, I and my family were sitting at the table (przy stole) and we were eating dinner. My Dad sayed: 'Tommorow, about eight p.m. o'clock visit as atypical and very important guest'. I and my sister really didn't know about who father say. We felt very excited.
Next day, I woke up very early, I cleaned my room before visit me mysterious guest. Then I dressed, later I ate breakfast and I brushed my teeth. After that I went to school.
When I came back to home was seven p.m. o'clock. I could not wait to meet our guest. I wanted do my homework but I could not concentrate. I look at the clock. It seemed to me that its hand to shift more slowly than usual. (Wydawało mi się, że jego wskazówki przesuwały się wolniej niż zwykle).
Finally, it came eight p.m. o'clock. I dressed my the most beautiful dress and impatient I looked out the window. (... i zniecierpliwiona patrzyłam przez okno.) Suddenly dorbell rung. I fast run open door. It was my father. I asked:
- Dad, where he is?
- There is. - sayed Dad when he was showing me big box.
I felt surprised. I opened box. Inside was little dog. He was cute! He was black and he had white spots (chodziło mi o takie 'skarpetki' jak mają psy itp. plamki chyba też może być?). On his neck he was tied red bow. (na szyi miał zawiązaną czerwoną kokardę). With big smile on my face I took him to my room and so has been with us forever. (z wielkim uśmiechem na twarzy zabrałam go do mojego pokoju i tak został z nami na zawsze). It was the best day if my life.


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[Hortencja]

Napisane przez agrr

MY CHILDHOOD MEMORY
It happend a few years ago. I was about eight years old. It was evening, me and my family were sitting at the table (przy stole) and we were eating dinner. My Dad said: 'Tommorow, about eight o'clock. an atypical and very important guest is going to visit us. Me and my sister really didn't know who was he talking about. We were very excited.
Next day, I woke up very early, I cleaned my room before my mysterious guest's visit. Then I dressed up,I ate breakfast and I brushed my teeth. After that I went to school.
When I came back home it was seven o'clock. I could not wait to meet our guest. I wanted to do my homework but I could not concentrate. I kept looking at the clock. It seemed to me that it was moving slower than usual. (Wydawało mi się, że jego wskazówki przesuwały się wolniej niż zwykle).
Finally, it was eight o'clock. I put on the most beautiful dress and impatiently I kept looking out the window. (... i zniecierpliwiona patrzyłam przez okno.) Suddenly the dorbell rang. I rushed to open the door. It was my father. I asked:
- Dad, where is he?
- There he is. - Dad said while showing the big box to me.
I felt surprised. I opened the box. Inside there was a little dog. He was cute! He was black and he had white spots (chodziło mi o takie 'skarpetki' jak mają psy itp. plamki chyba też może być?). On his neck he was had a red bow. (na szyi miał zawiązaną czerwoną kokardę). With big smile on my face I took him to my room and that is how he stayed with us forever (z wielkim uśmiechem na twarzy zabrałam go do mojego pokoju i tak został z nami na zawsze). It was the best day of my life.

Generalnie o psie lepiej pisać it a nie he, ale w tym kontekscie moze byc he

[SorbetMalinowy]

It happend a few years ago. I was about eight years old. It was evening, my family and I were sitting at the table (przy stole) and we were eating dinner. My Dad said: 'Tommorow, about eight p.m. a atypical and very important guest'll visit us '. My sister and I didn't know about who father said. We felt very excited.
Next day, I woke up very early, I had cleaned my room before visit me mysterious guest. Then I dressed up, later I ate breakfast and I brushed my teeth. After that I went to school.
When I came back to home was seven o'clock. I could not wait to meet our guest. I wanted to do my homework but I could not concentrate. I looked at the clock. It seemed that a leads went more slowly than usually.
Finally, it was eight o'clock. I dressed my the most beautiful dress and impatiently I looked out the window. Suddenly dorbell rung. I quickly opened the door. It was my father. I asked:
- Dad, where he is?
- Here you are. - said Dad when he was showing me a big box.
I felt surprised. I opened box. Inside there was a little dog. He was cute! He was black and he had white patches. It had a red bow on its neck.. With big smile on my face I took it to my room and this smile acomany us forever.

Nie jestem pewna czy na 100% wszystko dobrze poprawiłam

[_chocolate]

It happened a few years ago.
One evening, I was sitting with my family at the table and we were eating dinner. My Dad said: 'Tomorrow, about eight o'clock an atypical and a very important guest is going to visit us." My sister and I really didn't know who he was talking about. We were very excited.
Next day, I woke up very early and cleaned up my room before my mysterious guest's visit. Then I dressed up,(I) ate breakfast and (I) brushed my teeth. After that I went to school.
When I came back home it was seven o'clock. I could not wait to meet our guest. I wanted to do my homework but I could not concentrate. I kept looking at the clock. It seemed to me that it was moving slower than usually.Finally, it was eight o'clock. I put on the most beautiful dress and impatiently (I) kept looking out of the window. Suddenly, the doorbell rang. I rushed to open the door. It was my father. I asked:
- Dad, where is he?
- There he is. - Dad said, while showing the big box to me.
I felt surprised. I opened the box. Inside there was a little dog. He was cute! He was black and he had white socks. On his neck he had a red bow. With a big smile on my face, I took him to my room and that is how he stayed with us forever. It was the best day of my life.

[agrr]

Napisane przez Hortencja

Generalnie o psie lepiej pisać it a nie he, ale w tym kontekscie moze byc he

też się właśnie nad tym zastanawiałam. dziękuję bardzo.